Monday, December 14, 2015

Blog #12: Paired Poems Benchmark Essay & Reflection (Chimney Sweeper)

          Published in 1789 and 1794, William Blake wrote two poems both titled "The Chimney Sweeper". The first poem, published in 1789 reveals innocence of the young chimney sweep and in the second poem, published in 1794, he reflects on the experience aspect of the chimney sweep. Blake uses multiple poetic techniques including tone shifts, imagery, and rhyme schemes, using them differently in each poem.

          Looking first at the 1789 version, Blake uses imagery to portray the visions of a dream. In lines 11-16 Blake writes, "Thousands of sweepers, Dick, Joe, Ned, and Jack, were all of them lock'd up in coffins of black; And by came an Angel who had a bright key, And he open'd the coffins & set them all free. Then down a green plain, leaping laughing they run, And wash in a river and shine in the Sun." Then, looking at lines 5-7 of the 1794 version, Blake writes, "Because I was happy upon the heath, And smil'd among the winter's snow; They clothed me in the clothes of death." In the first version, Blake uses imagery to depict first a morbid scene, of small children in black coffins. However, this morbidity goes away as he describes the Angel setting them free by using words such as "green plain" and "leaping" and "shine" as these words are vastly different than what the boys experienced in real life. With this use of imagery, the author portrays the hope and innocence the young sweeps possessed, as the vivid dream brought them hope that they didn't need to fear harm because if they did end up in black coffins, they believed an angel would come set them free. This also portrays their innocence as they trusted in the idea of "the angel".  This is different in the second version of the poem however, because the imagery used doesn't create a joyful image in the reader's mind. Looking back at the line "clothed me in the clothes of death," this kind of represents the young sweep's loss of innocence and gain of experience, as he no longer trusts the adults because they believe the children are happy.

          Another technique Blake uses in both poems is the rhyme scheme. In the 1789 version, Blake uses an AA BB rhyme pattern consistently throughout the entire poem. Then looking at the 1794 version, Blake uses the same AA BB rhyme pattern in the first stanza, but uses an AB AB pattern throughout the rest of the poem. In the 1789 version, which is also the version that represents the innocence of the young sweeps, it shows the sweeps consistently trusting adults and authority, and the consistent rhyming pattern also reflects this. Looking at the 1794 version, when the rhyming switches to AB AB, this kind of represents the gain of experience of the young sweep, as they have learned that the adults don't understand their misery and learned through experience, that they shouldn't always trust them.


Reflection:

After writing the comparison and contrast essay and reading the benchmark essays, I definitely believe I could improve my response to receive a higher score. Although I understood what the prompt was asking and I used evidence from the poem, my analysis was kind of vague and I could've added another paragraph with more textual evidence. After reviewing the benchmark essays, I would say the most important thing that should be included in my essay is explicitly stating the differences between the poems, by saying the second one is telling the truth about chimney sweeps. Also after reading the benchmark essays, I think it would be a good idea to address metaphors, because they're used in both poems. I also didn't have time to address the tone shifts and I didn't have a three sentence thesis statement. Despite what I was lacking, I was able to discuss imagery and rhyming patterns used by Blake as well as use lines from the poem to support what I wrote. Overall though, since there were parts of analysis I was missing, I would give myself a 4-5.

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